关于学生工作的雅思作文范文

　　Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed to work hard when they are young. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
　　在学校和大学学生的压力越来越大，当他们年轻的时候就被迫努力工作，你认为这是一个积极或消极的发展吗？

　　In many countries，an increasing number of young people are working hard when they are young, a trend which raises considerable concern among many people. Views regarding this issue vary greatly from person to person. Although this tendency brings about some benefits，the drawbacks in terms of students' physical and psychological development are more obvious.

　　上海朗阁雅思点评:开篇点题，直接提出年轻人的压力问题。本段后一句为essay map，是高分作文开头的必备要素。

　　Some people might argue on the grounds that hard work can benefit people, especially young people，by molding them into the strong-willed. It is especially valuable in a time when more and more young people are spoiled.

　　上海朗阁雅思点评:Some people might ... on the grounds that为引出反方观点的常用表达，这里提出反方观点的目的有二:显示自己公平公允;立为靶子，而后攻击，这样方能突出自己的高明。此句说明 strongwilled的好处，是必记的拓展句型，运用范围很广。

　　It is understandable for these people to think so. However，I tend to think that working hard under a certain age can pose more potential threats to the development of young people. Physically speaking, young people are immature in terms of growth. Excessive work may give rise to a series of undesirable outcomes，such as，the deterioration of physical condition. It has already happened in many countries including China. What is more serious lies in the psychological aspect. It is not a rarity to read the reports that many youngsters have developed some kinds of mental disorders ranging from depression or anxiety to even a wish to commit suicide. I think too much stress from school work is the culprit. Furthermore, they might feel more desperate if they can not get what they hope for although they work very hard, thereby triggering a vicious circle.

　　上海朗阁雅思点评:第三段作者从生理和心理两方面阐述了压力对年轻人所造成的潜在威胁。一般某件事情对人的影响往往可以从“生理和心理”两方面展开。

　　Considering the seriousness of the negative effects，I think certain measures should be taken.The most effective one is creating an environment where young people can feel less stressful. In a word, hard work should be highly, but not excessively valued.

　　上海朗阁雅思点评:后一段提出了一些解决问题的措施，这是高分考生的特点，无须多说，举一个重要的措施即可。