关于教学重点的雅思作文范文

　　Schools should emphasise more on academic issues，which is more important for students’future job，rather than sports and music. What is your opinion?
　　学校应重视对学术问题，这样对学生未来的工作更有作用，而不是体育和音乐，你的意见是什么？

　　Nowadays，many people harbour the view that schools should put a higher price on academic subjects，because, in their eyes，without a qualification from a reputable school or university，the odds of landing that plum job advertised in the paper are considerably shortened. Although this view does make sense to some extent，music and sports actually play a more pivotal role in job-hunting.

　　上海朗阁雅思点评:开门见山地提出题目中的观点，并对其理由稍加说明，以示你对此观点的深刻理解。然后铺陈essay map，将主体段的主要内容摆上桌面，让读者一目了然。强烈建议记住without a qualification …一句，此句如用在学习和就业方面的题目定能增色不少。

　　It is understandable for people to value academic performance，because it is really the case that obtaining a best job is becoming more competitive and graduating with rosy academic records does have some edge. For example, in China, if a person has a good command of English, it is relatively easy for him to find a decent and well-paid job.

　　上海朗阁雅思点评:第二段对反方观点做出让步，先承认其有一定道理，显示你的公允态度。提出观点后，要想想可否用例子加以说明。一则可弥补“字荒”的问题，再则可增加观点的力度。

　　However，reaching that conclusion does not necessarily mean the same as assuming that we should attach less importance to sports and music，which are a far cry from being useless in terms of job hunting. It is important to remember that students need to develop more skills other than academic ones;and the best way to do this is taking part in some sports，which are beneficial not only physically but also intellectually. More importantly, by playing some sports，students can form strong personal relationships with the friends they play with, thereby greatly increasing the opportunities for finding a job by drawing on these relationships.

　　上海朗阁雅思点评:得出上述结论并不等同于认为我们应忽视体育和音乐的重要性。此段首句应熟记。此句承接上下文，保持了段与段之间的流畅，这是至关重要的。为切合题意，阐述体育的好处时要与就业联系在一起。

　　To conclude, academic subjects, of course, play a vital role in this highly competitive society. Sports and music, however, are equally or even more important because of their intrinsic value.